Edyth Kamansky
Tuesday, August 9, 2011
Is this good. I need improvment suggestions?
I like it. If you just want suggestions...try "watching" instead of "seeing" and change "caring' to something more detached. Since the character is, by implication, detached from the "audience". Good luck! It is good as it stands. ;-))
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